Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

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Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Sophie posted in this thread ( forum.susana.org/23-hygiene-and-hand-was...-or-super-amma#23709 ) that she is working on "I am looking at the gap between WASH and nutrition and stunting in infants in Ethiopia - particularly the contribution of environmental enteric dysfunction from chronic pathogen exposure."

So this prompted me to bring to your attention that we have a Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy" (same thing as environmental enteric dysfunction (?)) which has recently been improved as part of a course work assignement at a university in the U.S. and which could benefit from further improvements.
See here:
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Environmental_enteropathy

Sophie would you like to help improve this important Wikipedia article? That would be great.

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P.S. I love it when universities get their students to work on Wikipedia articles as part of their course work. The latest round of improvements came about based on this course at the University of California called "Expanding WikiProject Medicine":
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Wiki_Ed/...all_2017_(Fall_2017)

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Re: Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Please have a look at this interesting paper:

Environmental Enteropathy: Critical implications of a poorly understood condition
Poonum S. Korpe and William A. Petri
Division of Infectious Diseases and International Health, University of Virginia, Charlottesville, VA, USA
www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3372657/

Concluding remarks says (in part):

Children and adults who inhabit a fecally contaminated environment are at risk for the
development of EE, which is marked by alterations in intestinal architecture, increased
intestinal inflammation and permeability, deranged gut immune response, and growth
faltering. These changes have important implications for dealing with maladies that affect
the developing world, including malnutrition and infectious diseases control.


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Yes the Korpe paper is a very good read.
EE is now more commonly known as environmental enteric dysfunction - see:
journals.sagepub.com/doi/10.1177/156482651303400308

I'd be more than happy to look over the entry Elisabeth - certainly I'm not an expert yet but I've read most of the papers out there.

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Re: Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Dear Sophie,

Great, thanks for volunteering to look at the Wikipedia article on environmental enteropathy and to help to improve it.
You can either do it like Marcos did it for Waste Stabilisation Ponds (he copied it to Word and marked up his changes in a Word document), see here forum.susana.org/discussions-about-speci...-stabilization-ponds , or make the changes yourself directly in Wikipedia, following the Wikipedia editing rules. Whichever method you prefer is fine.

Be sure to also take a look at the talk page where we have already discussed some shortcomings and possible improvements of this article:
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Environmental_enteropathy

Thanks!

Dear Mughal,
Thanks for pointing out more literatur on this topic. With the Wikipedia work, we try to provide some curation and "translation for the layperson" services, i.e. we try to ensure the most relevant papers are cited in the Wikipedia articles and their findings translated into a language that normal persons (non-experts) can understand and appreciate.

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Re: Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Elisabeth,
Thanks for the guidance.
Perhaps if I copy into a word doc I can highlight with suggestions - then you can decide whether to incorporate them or not :)
Thanks,
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Hi Elisabeth!

I apologise for neglecting to look at this so far... it is now on my to-do list for today and this week.
I will send over a word document when I have given it some work!

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Sophie, I'm glad you're taking on this article. I've been stumped about how to improve readability. It looks like it could use some clarifications and simplifying of concepts, without sacrificing accuracy. Looking forward to seeing your work on this one.

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Thanks Diane - I am by no means an expert on the topic but will give it a go and make some suggestions!
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Re: Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Hello everyone,

Please find attached my draft for the Wikipedia article on EED.

As I mentioned to Elisabeth in an email, I'm quite happy for some parts and not others (or none at all!) to be used, or whatever would be most useful.

Hope it is of some use. Please do let me know if I can help further.

Many thanks,
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Re: Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Dear Sophie,

Thanks for this. Just a clarification question: did you start the Word document by taking the current Wikipedia article? Do you have a version that shows it with "tracked changes" on, so I can see which parts have been added or modified by you, and which parts were already there?

I can't really paste the entire Word document over the existing Wikipedia article but would normally add new sentences or paragraphs or modify existing ones. The previous authors would find it baffling if their entire work got overriden in one go (although it can be done in extreme cases, e.g. if the existing article is really very bad).

For the benefit of others, we are talking about this article here:
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Environmental_enteropathy

Another small thing is that there is a Wikipedia convention to put references always at the end of the sentence, after the fullstop rather than within the sentence. If the reference only applies to the first part of the sentence for example then a solution might be to break the sentence up into two. Shorter sentences are also better for readability.

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Dear Elisabeth,

Sophie has produced a very useful document. If I'm not mistaken, she produced the document at your request.

Is there any other way of accommodating the Sophie's document? For example, the current wikipedia write-up has the caption EE; Sophie's document has the heading EED. The first line of the wikipedia article says:

Environmental enteropathy (EE) (also known as tropical enteropathy or environmental enteric dysfunction)

You can put star on EED above, which can then lead to Sophie's document. This is just what came to my mind - you know better; think of some way out - adjust Sophie's document, please.

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Re: Improving Wikipedia article on "Environmental enteropathy"

Dear Ms. Sophie,

Kindly have a look at these 2 documents:

Environmental Enteric Dysfunction: Pathogenesis, Diagnosis, and Clinical Consequences
Gerald T. Keusch, Donna M. Denno, Robert E. Black, Christopher Duggan, Richard L. Guerrant, James V. Lavery, James P. Nataro, Irwin H. Rosenberg, Edward T. Ryan, Phillip I. Tarr, Honorine Ward, Zulfiqar A. Bhutta, Hoosen Coovadia, Aldo Lima, Balakrishnan Ramakrishna, Anita K. M. Zaidi, Deborah C. Hay Burgess, and Thomas Brewer

Implications of acquired environmental enteric dysfunction for growth and stunting in infants and
children living in low- and middle-income countries
Gerald T. Keusch, Irwin H. Rosenberg, Donna M. Denno, Christopher Duggan, Richard L. Guerrant, James V. Lavery, Philip I. Tarr, Honorine D. Ward, Robert E. Black, James P. Nataro, Edward T. Ryan, Zulfiqar A. Bhutta, Hoosen Coovadia, Aldo Lima, Balakrishnan Ramakrishna, Anita K. M. Zaidi, Deborah C. Hay Burgess, and Thomas Brewer

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